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Lyrics that I wrote

Postby The Ultimate » 27 Jun 2015, 01:38

For a song. I also have the music written down (heavy and dark). Comments?
 
Alone in the Dark
 
The streets are empty
Night envelops me
I look up and wonder
Is there a heaven for me
 
What am I here for
What if there's no reason
Why am I living
When I should've died
 
Drinking, playing
Laughing, crying
Sinning, praying
Living, dying
 
Now it's the morning
But it's still so dark
I look down and wonder
Is there a hell for me
 
What am I here for
What if there's no reason
Why am I living
When I should've died
 
We are alone in the dark
We are alone in the dark
We are alone
We are alone
We are alone
We are alone
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Re: Lyrics that I wrote

Postby User » 27 Jun 2015, 08:38

i think i ... could comment, but i'm not going to
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Re: Lyrics that I wrote

Postby shadowalk » 27 Jun 2015, 09:45

I look at those lyrics and I think of a rock song in drop D with a melodic chorus.
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Re: Lyrics that I wrote

Postby The Ultimate » 27 Jun 2015, 12:55

[quote="User"]
i think i ... could comment, but i'm not going to
[/quote]
 
These are not final. I could still add maybe a verse and change words around a little.
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Re: Lyrics that I wrote

Postby The Ultimate » 27 Jun 2015, 12:57

[quote="shadowalk"]
I look at those lyrics and I think of a rock song in drop D with a melodic chorus.
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It's not a rock song. It's a really heavy, metal song.
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Re: Lyrics that I wrote

Postby scunt. » 27 Jun 2015, 15:36

it's karmablade all over again
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Re: Lyrics that I wrote

Postby The Ultimate » 27 Jun 2015, 15:46

Are my lyrics not brootal enough for you
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Re: Lyrics that I wrote

Postby Verbal » 27 Jun 2015, 16:58

the lyrics for any song ever written sound stupid and this is no exception
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Re: Lyrics that I wrote

Postby The Ultimate » 27 Jun 2015, 17:04

I guess you're right.
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Re: Lyrics that I wrote

Postby The Ultimate » 27 Jun 2015, 17:05

So what should I do, scrap em?
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Re: Lyrics that I wrote

Postby turd monsoon 2: low-pressure buildup » 27 Jun 2015, 17:05

[quote="Lt. Conrad Gillett"]
(heavy and dark)
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zim wrote:(it's usually really dark)
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Re: Lyrics that I wrote

Postby shadowalk » 27 Jun 2015, 19:07

That line that goes 'Now it's the morning, But it's still so dark' is pure genius.
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Re: Lyrics that I wrote

Postby rhino » 28 Jun 2015, 00:50

[quote="sassapants"]
 
<blockquote class="ipsBlockquote" data-author="Lt. Conrad Gillett" data-cid="551027" data-time="1435345688">
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(heavy and dark)
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Re: Lyrics that I wrote

Postby shadowalk » 28 Jun 2015, 17:34

archive: the good
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Re: Lyrics that I wrote

Postby User » 29 Jun 2015, 07:42

:gaylol:
 
i wish i was a better hard-on bearer and could write something supportive of imran's literary aspirations
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Re: Lyrics that I wrote

Postby Lavabug » 29 Jun 2015, 08:25

[quote="Lt. Conrad Gillett"]
 

It's not a rock song. It's a really heavy, metal song.
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Re: Lyrics that I wrote

Postby The Ultimate » 29 Jun 2015, 13:31

[quote="User"]
:gaylol:
 
i wish i was a better hard-on bearer and could write something supportive of imran's literary aspirations
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Re: Lyrics that I wrote

Postby User » 30 Jun 2015, 06:41

they are definitely not socialist enough, i fixed them
 
The streets are full of workers
We envelop the night
I look up and wonder
Is there a utopia
 
What am I here for?
What if there's no reason
Why am I working
Exploited, I tried
 
Working, paying
Laughing, crying
Slaving, praying
Living, dying
 
Now it's the morning
Factories still dark
I look across and wonder
How to save us
 
What am I here for?
What if there's no reason
Why am I working
Exploited, I tried
 
We are alone in the dark
We are alone in the dark
We are alone
We are alone
We are alone
We are alone
 
No factory lights for me and for you
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Re: Lyrics that I wrote

Postby Josh » 30 Jun 2015, 10:33

:redneck:

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