MABB v6.6.6

For a song. I also have the music written down (heavy and dark). Comments?
 
Alone in the Dark
 
The streets are empty
Night envelops me
I look up and wonder
Is there a heaven for me
 
What am I here for
What if there's no reason
Why am I living
When I should've died
 
Drinking, playing
Laughing, crying
Sinning, praying
Living, dying
 
Now it's the morning
But it's still so dark
I look down and wonder
Is there a hell for me
 
What am I here for
What if there's no reason
Why am I living
When I should've died
 
We are alone in the dark
We are alone in the dark
We are alone
We are alone
We are alone
We are alone

i think i ... could comment, but i'm not going to

I look at those lyrics and I think of a rock song in drop D with a melodic chorus.

[quote="User"]
i think i ... could comment, but i'm not going to
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These are not final. I could still add maybe a verse and change words around a little.

[quote="shadowalk"]
I look at those lyrics and I think of a rock song in drop D with a melodic chorus.
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It's not a rock song. It's a really heavy, metal song.

it's karmablade all over again

Are my lyrics not brootal enough for you

the lyrics for any song ever written sound stupid and this is no exception

I guess you're right.

So what should I do, scrap em?

[quote="Lt. Conrad Gillett"]
(heavy and dark)
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That line that goes 'Now it's the morning, But it's still so dark' is pure genius.

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i wish i was a better hard-on bearer and could write something supportive of imran's literary aspirations

[quote="Lt. Conrad Gillett"]
 

It's not a rock song. It's a really heavy, metal song.
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[quote="User"]

 
i wish i was a better hard-on bearer and could write something supportive of imran's literary aspirations
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You can bash them if you like. Register your disappointment.

they are definitely not socialist enough, i fixed them
 
The streets are full of workers
We envelop the night
I look up and wonder
Is there a utopia
 
What am I here for?
What if there's no reason
Why am I working
Exploited, I tried
 
Working, paying
Laughing, crying
Slaving, praying
Living, dying
 
Now it's the morning
Factories still dark
I look across and wonder
How to save us
 
What am I here for?
What if there's no reason
Why am I working
Exploited, I tried
 
We are alone in the dark
We are alone in the dark
We are alone
We are alone
We are alone
We are alone
 
No factory lights for me and for you